Problems with the draft

EDIT  28TH OCT: I RECREATED THIS BOARD WITH REALTIME BOARD WHICH YOU CAN LOOK AT [HERE]

This outlines some of the real problems and I will work to fix them in my final piece.

From my own knowledge and with the assistance of my teacher, I've addressed the major flaws in my work and this ensures that I will not make these same mistakes in my final piece. More specifically, it has highlighted to me the importance of getting professional photography done and refining my editing skills. I need to do research into my target audience to ensure that I can refine to language used to suit them and I need to pay close attention to my grammar. I think that my article would be more grammatically correct if I wrote it out in word and proofread it as opposed to typing it up in the photoshop text box. Additionally, it has helped me look at composition and made me realize the importance of working from an existing magazine. Whilst I do like my composition in this instance, I feel as if there is a large margin for improvement in the future.