Contents Page #2 - Feedback

My cousin is a member of my target audience as he is a twenty year old man with a well-paying job who enjoys indie music. I asked him to look at the draft I've done and give me one-on-one feedback to help me improve:

You’ve changed a lot here but I like it. It looks a lot more mature now. The colour scheme is really peaceful and the font is more mature. I think the editor’s note is a selling point because it appeals directly to the audience – a direct mode of address. And I think the photo is more suited to this part of the magazine