DPS #1 and #2 - Feedback

My cousin is a member of my target audience as he is a twenty year old man with a well-paying job who enjoys indie music. I asked him to look at the draft I've done and give me one-on-one feedback to help me improve:

I like the fonts on that one. I like the picture too. It’s really interesting with the sweets. This one’s really colourful and the title really draws your attention in. The pull quotes draw your attention in well as well. I think that’s cool. You need to add things to that black bar on the top though.

The background’s nice because it adds to the theme. I’m not sure if it looks unprofessional though. Also the writing on the black bar is good. The ‘big story’ would attract a readers attention.