Contents Page #5

My cousin is a member of my target audience as he is a twenty year old man with a well-paying job who enjoys indie music. I asked him to look at the draft I've done and give me one-on-one feedback to help me improve:

  This one matches your other pages a lot more now because you’ve taken some of the colour out of the models. You’ve made the T.A seem younger but I think you wanted that. It’s more colourful and more exciting and you’ve got a lot more red – which is really powerful. You’ve got a little bit of empty space, could you fill that?