Contents Page #2 - Feedback

My cousin is a member of my target audience as he is a twenty year old man with a well-paying job who enjoys indie music. I asked him to look at the draft I've done and give me one-on-one feedback to help me improve:

You’ve changed a lot here but I like it. It looks a lot more mature now. The colour scheme is really peaceful and the font is more mature. I think the editor’s note is a selling point because it appeals directly to the audience – a direct mode of address. And I think the photo is more suited to this part of the magazine 

Contents Draft #2

I've changed a lot here to make it fit a more mature audience and I've based this front cover more off Mojo

I added in an editors note but I feel as if my editing style has been similar. This was to appeal to an older target audience but I feel like I've made it look a little bit too old.

2nd Front Cover Draft

This definitley looks more like a real front cover that the other pieces I've done. I don't like the way the fonts seem to blend into the background and I'm planning on changing them around. However, I do like the way the masthead dips behind the models head. I still want to see how Leah would look on the cover before I make any decisions. 

Contents Page #1 - Feedback

My cousin is a member of my target audience as he is a twenty year old man with a well-paying job who enjoys indie music. I asked him to look at the draft I've done and give me one-on-one feedback to help me improve:

This is a cool layout. It looks a bit like one from Q. I think you need to crop these images a bit so there’s less white and make the features section a bit bigger and easier to read. I like the ‘contents’  font. It’s different and it stands out. It looks like you’re appealing to a quite young audience though so you might want to make it more mature.

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2nd December

Aims:

- Produce a contents page draft

- Revise front cover flatplan
- Receive feedback

Reflect:

I'm not happy with the contents page draft I produced but I am happy with the front cover flatplan. I think that I am making improvements and will continue to do so. The feedback I received from my uncle was also very helpful. 

Front Page Flat-plan (REVISED)

I like this flatplan a lot more. It does not have an actual base on any real magazine but I took inspiration from Under The Radar. This feels more professional and there's a lot more going on that would make it interesting. I listened to my survey results and decided to add in free gifts. The subimage down the left will be the posters that come with the magazine and the square blow that will have the text about the free posters. I also have more sell lines now which boasts that my magazine will have  more content which will help it sell and appeal. 

I based my title position off the of Under The Radar as they have a successful magazine and therefore I feel safe taking inspiration from them. 

The other sell lines have not taken the focus away from the main band as it still has the most room on the page with the enlarged band name at the bottom. Having it off centre creates visual interest. 

I will try to go for a red colour scheme once more and edit my photo so that the headphones on the photo are red whilst the body is B&W like I was initially planning on having on the contents page. 

Contents 1st Draft

This was my first contents draft. I don't like it very much. I definitely left too much white in the images and need to crop it down. I also don't get a very professional vibe from it and need to work with image editing and different fonts. I do like the red colour scheme in this though I need to experiment with colour further. Editing the headphones to make them the only thing not greyscale was surprisingly easy and had a very dramatic effect that was exactly what I wanted.